Fanfic in need of beta + other stuff

So, anyone familiar with my newest fanfic yet? I uploaded it to FF.net last Saturday, and so far I've gotten 6 reviews, 4 alerts and one fave on it. That's the best record I've done so far with any of my fanfics. All the reviews praised my fanfic. No, I'm not lying, they really did. Okay, one said I made awfully lot of grammar mistakes, but I know that I do. My first language is not English, and even though my writing program does proofreading, and I proofread my own texts, I have very much problems with prepositions and such. Finnish, my native language, uses suffixes when inflecting words, so of course I have troubles writing English.
I've been learning English for eight years, and I do exellently in the tests. Despite my A+ grades, I know I'm not perfect. We learn the written form; in real life, people talk with dialects, shorten words, use text talk and abbreviations. I'm not familiar with lots of idioms, so it makes me hard to express stuff. I do understand them, though.

This said, it's clear that I'd do better with a beta reader. Unfortunately, I'm way too shy to talk to people to get one. I know, a blog isn't the best place to say it, because I only have two readers and one of them is a Finn.

(And that definitely was not my original subject for this post...)

So, may I move to my purposed subject now? I was going to tell you that I've changed my plans a bit from what I originally designed Crashlanding to be. It was supposed to be a normal Hurt/Comfort story, but it may in fact turn into a really genius fic to get my OC Amy Whitespot into the Jedi Order. I'm not telling you more about that, but I must tell you that I was inspired by Agatha Christie's Death on the Nile. My mom was watching it when I was starting chapter two, and I'm not really sure how soon I'll get to write that part. I might also change the current chapter one to be part one of the first chapter, the second chapter being part two of first, and making third published chapter the official chapter two. Like this: 'Chapter one, part I: Steel, fuel and blood', 'Chapter one, part II' and 'Chapter two'.

Sleeping Anakin is cute, no matter the situation

LOL I keep seeing really weird dreams. Apparently I thought too much of TCW before going to bed. On the other hand, it's been a while since I saw Anakin in my dreams, so this was (excuse my pun) a dream come true.

I had no idea where I was in that dream, but it looked like hotel of something. Could have been inspired by AGC II: Chaos in the CityCloset, where all the characters live in a huge cube-shaped building. Anyway, I've got no idea what the dream was about, but I saw Anakin there somewhere at some point. And I had an interesting book I was reading. It basically listed few reasons why few jedis would get sick/ill/whatever. Well, I thought the book was about that, but I have no idea what Obi-Wan and Mace were doing in that book. Although, it's not that uncommon for books to change subject while reading when in dreamland. And I think I can remember what Anakin's page said... Yeah, if I remeber correctly, it said that he would get down with stress. At that point, I was like: "-_- you're not even trying" to that book, as my imagination would come up with anything. Yes, I though of that inside the dream!

Also, I'm quite sure I saw Anakin sleeping in that dream. :3 He looked cute. And he was sleeping shirtless ^^
Okay, that wasn't the point of that part :'D I got a bit stuck thinking how to say this. But anyway, Anakin's prosthetic arm was way off from what it's in ep. III. It was only from shoulder to elbow, rest of his arm was normal. And it was his left arm. Even in the dream I noticed that first part, but that second part hit me only now as I'm writing this. And now that I think, his arm looked more like Ed's automail from FMA than what his arm really is like in SW.

Yeah, I have weird dreams, don't I?

P.S. There was more about this dream, but I chose not to write it to keep this post even somewhat readable. When I start explaining stuff really deep, it usually contains few inside jokes you wouldn't get.
P.P.S. Now I want to draw Anakin in pink princess dress. >D

Browser choices

I have quite large Warriors-websites, and I really want them to work on every common browser. I have Mozilla Firefox 5.0 as my default browser, with Internet Explorer 9 and Google Chrome 12 as secondary browsers to update my other dA accounts. No need for signing in and out, when every accout uses different browser :'D
I also downloaded Rockmelt, because I wanted to see what it was XD. And with the latest iTunes update I got Safari 5, and just recently I downloaded Opera 11. Last two came really handy when testing the new layout I'm planning for my websites, because they didn't understand a part of my coding IE and FF could understand, so there was a big mistake that only showed up in smaller browsers. I soon realized what it was and got it fixed, though.

So, are there any other common browsers? Older versions don't count, as I can't check my sites on IE7/8 or FF3.6, for example, because newer version usually overrides the older.

The new US copyright law?

Just what is going on? I log on to dA and I see people screaming 'OMG WE CAN'T BE FANS ANYMORE!!!!!!!111' What? I chack some petitions and see it's about a new law that will ban streaming copyrighted material. Mainly that means music, videogames, TV series and movies. Sure, YouTube would lose a lot material due to that law, but does it even have a change at getting through?

I don't live in US, but I believe that this law would affect me. It would ban music videos on YouTube, for example. I've found a lot of great songs and remixes on YT, and that's definitely a good thing.

But now I get to the real point of this post. Are people on dA overreacting? They claim this law would also ban fanart and fiction, but does it really? They aren't actually stremaing the content, but rather derivate works of it. Well, my English sucks, so 'derivate' may not be the right word for this situation. What I mean was that fanart and fiction lean on copyrighted material for source. That's not illegal, is it? Just how much would this law change dA or other websites with works relying on copyrighted material that had their servers on US ground?

ep. 3.18-20 - Linnaketrilogia

Echo! Fives! We've missed ya, bruthas!

Betaversio siinä mielessä, että teen kyllä vielä pidemmän, jahka jaksan ottaa lisää kuvia. Saas sitten nähdä mitä tästä tulee.
(Ja kyllä, tuo on valtava hologrammi Rexistä :'D)
Muutamia juttuja jotka toistuu useempaan kertaan:
- Nerot käännökset. "Somiste" XD
- Ahsokan ilmeet. Sen takia sanon että animaattoreilla on joko liian hauskaa tai liikaa aikaa.
- Musiikilliset vihjeet. Imperial March vikassa jaksossa anyone?
- Anakinin ja Tarkinin keskustelut. Tuskin edes tarvii jääkaappilogiikkaa että tajuaa missä "vitsi" piilee.

Selvä, sitten asiaan. Rexin kuva meni tohon ekaks sen takia ettei nää ite selostukselliset kuvat tulis ekaks, ja muutenkin, sininen hologrammi sopii siniseen blogiin.
Normaalit varoitukset voimassa: hulluja vitsejä, TVTropesia, viittauksia elokuviin ja aikasempiin jaksoihin jne.

Some quotes from my TCW S4 fanfic

I said in my last post that I'm writing one. And I like that fic very, very much. And now I'd like some feedback on it. I'm on sixth page, and first chapter isn't completed. Yeah, I like writing long stuff. Anyway, here are some of the best part so far:

“Is this the place?” Padmé asked, scaring Ahsoka slightly with her appearance.

“This is where Rex was shooting droids. Skyguy got hit probably... there!” Ahsoka pointed to the north-east after recognizing some of the trees that appeared also on Rex's recording.

“How far?” Padmé asked anxiously.

“Not far, around 50-100 meters. This vid wouldn't be as sharp if zoomed more.” Ahsoka said and looked ahead them. They were facing north-east, and the path droids had used was clearly visible in the long grass that few small trees spotted. The grass was now burned and trampled, still smoking in some places. Ahsoka noticed a medium-sized hole, created by an exploding grenade, in the ground right where her master could have been standing.

“This way!” Ahsoka shouted to the senator, who ran after her. Their feet blew ash and dirt off the ground, and Ahsoka found her eyes getting wet. I am not crying. I will NOT cry, she thought and ducked under a branch to reach the hole.

Her foot got stuck to the roots of the tree which branches she just ducked, and she stumbled down to the bomb crater. She quickly got up and spit out the dirt she had breathed in tumbling down the slope.

This one is from the first page. Honestly. Am I doing well, bad, or very bad? (joke would work in Finnish, where "well" and "very" can be the same word "hyvin")

Shouting. Shooting. Massive clanking of droids.”Sir, are you sure this is going to work?” Rex asked from Anakin who wasn't visible on screen.

“Have my plans ever failed, Rex?” Anakin said. The recording showed Anakin running towards the droids. He blocked and ducked most of the blaster bolts aimed at him, but just where Ahsoka was now standing, something hit him. He almost collapsed, but kept blocking the bolts with his lightsaber in one hand, the other clutching his stomach.

“SIR!!!” Rex shouted, even though Anakin had no chance of hearing it from that distance. Something flew in the air, landing behind and right from Anakin. It was a grenade. Anakin tried to jump away from it to escape the blast, but he was wounded and too slow: the exploding grenade caught him mid-air and sent him flying to the left, to the grass, away from the droids.

“Okay! Who blaster-kriffer threw that grenade?!” Rex shouted to his fellow troops as he turned briefly around. On another side of the path, a clone hesitantly lifted his gun to show he was to blame, but before Rex managed to shout anything to his brother, the clone was shot straight through his head.

“Oh for the love of Kamino...” Rex muttered under his breath and turned back to shoot the droids.

This one is right in the beginning of the second page. It's a holocam recording that Rex gave to Ahsoka. I think you'll now figure out what my fanfic is aiming for, and where it started from...

The grass twisted under their legs, moving away when Ahsoka pushed it. Her fingers were now full of scratches from the grass, and probably so was her back. She didn't care; she saw an opening in the grass and ran for it, expecting to see her master laying there motionless, maybe even dead.

She was shocked of what she saw. Nothing, absolutely nothing. “But... but this is the place where he must have landed!” Ahsoka whimpered and fell to her knees. Tears fell from her eyes, dropping from her cheeks to her thick shirt.

“Ahsoka. I'm sure we can still find him. Hope must never be fully lost.” Padmé said. Ahsoka heard even her voice was trembling, probably she was crying, too. She lifted her gaze from the grass under her legs, and she noticed something shiny in middle of the opening. She got up and walked to it.

“NO!” Ahsoka yelled as loud as she could as she recognized the object. It was a lightsaber. The one that belonged to her master, to be exact. She lifted it from ground, not thinking of any possible traps around. Nothing happened, for her luck. Ahsoka collapsed to her knees once again, now clutching Anakin's lightsaber in her hands. From her tears, she didn't notice a small datacard beside the lightsaber.

“Ahsoka.” Padmé said gently. Ahsoka wanted to refuse to listen; all had been lost. Her master was no longer here. The Chosen One was no longer here. Ahsoka let the tears pour from her eyes and she sobbed very loudly.

“Ahsoka. Listen to me.” Padmé said and knelt in front of Ahsoka. Her vision was so blurry from crying that she didn't see Padmé lift the datacard from ground. “Calm down.” Padmé said. Ahsoka shook her head and clutched her master's lightsaber ever more tightly. “Ahsoka, everything's going to turn alright. I know it.” Padmé said, hugging Ahsoka. Ahsoka was startled at this sudden expression of emotion, but then relaxed and let Padmé soothe her. Ahsoka couldn't stop herself from crying or sobbing, but eventually calmed down. Padmé wiped her eyes after she had stopped crying. She still was shaking, and now coughed a couple of times to clear her throat. She took a deep breath and looked up.

No, this fanfic doesn't have AhsokaxPadmé. I know it may look like that. And that datacard is important. I just love to write like this, don't I? :'D I don't know... I think this is one of the better-written parts, with narrator that know all. Usually my narrations are POV things: not 1st person, but not all-knowing. It only knows what going around in one persons head. That would be like... 3rd person 1st person narration? Anyway, more from the fic:

“But... But Anakin was s-s-so injured!” Padmé exclaimed and started crying herself. Ahsoka wanted to hug her, to thank from bringing her back to her senses, but knew it wouldn't do anything.

“You love him... don't you?” Ahsoka asked. She wanted to slap herself after she realized what she had said.

Padmé looked at her in deep shock, but then nodded carefully. “M-more than you r-realize.” she sobbed. Ahsoka suddenly got the whole picture. Her master and senator Amidala loved each other. More than Jedi Code allowed. They loved each other enough to risk others' lives to save each other.

“I think I understand. I love him too, Padmé.” Ahsoka said, trying to keep herself from crying again.

Padmé shot up. “You have no idea how love feels like! You're a Jedi!” she shouted, scaring Ahsoka for a moment. She retaliated quickly, though and got up herself.

“We are allowed to love just like other people. I love my master, more than I should or is allowed, and that's the only reason we still care for each other!” Ahsoka shouted back.

Padmé took a step back, then sat down to the ground. He eyes were red from all crying and shouting, and Ahsoka found herself panting again.

Who knows, maybe Padmé isn't so OoC here. I think this is how she'll be before starting Roaring Rampage of Revenge on Dooku for capturing Anakin. And THAT's canon. The datacard mentioned in the third quote is relevant, as it shows Anakin injured from that grenade blast mentioned in the second quote. And you can guess who else >D
Anyway, is this a good way to make Ashoka and Padme reveal their feelings for Anakin to each other? they're both girls, and I personally know that we all shout things we might have otherwise left unsaid when we're angry. But I think I took it to a bit extreme here...

“Actually... I think my master might already think I know. He talks of you differently when I'm the only one nearby as opposed to times when someone like Obi-Wan or a higher Jedi Master is present.”

“I think he just loves you back.” Padmé said. “Did you know that during the time you were lost, after your mission to Felucia, Anakin was completely broken. I caught him crying at least two times, and when he slept with me, he had nightmares about you and often woke up crying.” Padmé looked away sheepishly. “I don't think I should have told you that. I don't think even he knows I know.”

“I... I suspected something like that.” Ahsoka said and sighed. “He looks like that. He does nag to me sometimes, when I don't obey, but otherwise he acts like he'd protect me from anything.”

“Isn't that what Jedis are supposed to do? Protect others even if it meant risking one's own life?” Padmé asked.

I think you can all guess what just happened. And here I also probably made Anakin a bit OoC with that musing for Ahsoka. Those episodes are currently airing here, so I remember well what happened in the end of 3.21. 3.22 airs tomorrow, and I'm really looking forward to it, because I haven't watched it yet from internet.

She collapsed to her bed and started crying again. She hugged her pillow for comfort but she felt completely empty inside. She sobbed loudly and curled up in the corner, leaning to wall. She was shaking under her sobbing, and soon she drifted into restless sleep.

She was floating in the air, above her unconscious master. He looked alright, not counting in the bruises and slashes visible in his skin. He was laying on a cool floor of a cell, probably on board a Separatist spaceship.

His eyes slowly opened and Ahsoka saw one of them slightly twitching. He tried to get up, but collapsed shaking. He couched feebly, blood dripping from the corner of his mouth. He turned to his side, and Ahsoka saw huge burns in his back. She gasped in shock: this was far worse than she had imagined. She lowered to the ground and tried to hug her master, but couldn't, as she was pulled back by something. Anakin seemed to have noticed her, and he turned his head to her direction. “Ahsoka... Please...” he seemed to say, even though Ahsoka couldn't make out the words. Suddenly, his master's body started to shiver and convulse, his eyes rolled backwards and he couched up more blood. When the convulsing eased, he started scratching his own arms, causing more bleeding. He drifted back to unconsciousness, but Ahsoka heard him say, “Please... K-kill me...”

“Master!” Ahsoka screamed as she woke up. She was panting heavily and she had to calm herself down before she got up. She hugged her pillow again and wiped her tears to it. For a long time, she just sat there, on the edge of her bed, clinging to her pillow for comfort she would never get from it.

Ahsoka was mentioned jsut in the last sentece before this quote, and I won't change these when I put them here.
And yeah... Very angsty Ahsoka, and very injured Anakin. Can anyone figure out yet what has happened? + Ahsoka technically saw to the future, Anakin isn't really in that bad shape at that moment. *got some ideas from Duel at Shattered Rock* <- I recommend that book, btw. It has clones IN LOVE!!!! I was like 'd'awwg' *heart melts* when I head it. + it has injured jedi, a Chiss, Mandalorians, and just general awesomeness.

And... I think that was about it. Rest of what I've written so far isn't really worth quoting, and besides, I like these parts way more than the rest. Please, tell me what you think of them!

TCW S3 ends tomorrow D:

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! I don't want this season to end -_- I need my weekly TCW.
But on the other hand, it would be fun to make reviews of earlier episodes, with screencaps, of course. Two days ago I watched all my favorite episodes from S1, which are 1.06, 1.11-12, 1.13 and 1.22. Can anyone guess what those episodes have in common? :'D And 2.21 belongs to the same group. Anyone get it now? Season three has at least 3.16-17 and 3.18, and 3.21 almost qualifies with the ending. Even 3.12 has a small scene of this, and so has 2.18. (Yes, I did check episode list to see if I missed any S3 eps.)

I think I'll try to catch that drunken Obi-Wan again... 2.03 was fun when pausing at the right/wrong moment XD